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Post by Shika Aburame on Fri Mar 21, 2008 10:53 pm

"i luv her more than the stars in the sky
wen im w/ her i cannot die
our luv is as pure as gold
our lives r about to unfold"
tell me if u like it!!!
the person who i dedicate this to?u kno who u r!^^
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Post by Shika Aburame on Fri Mar 21, 2008 11:08 pm

no opinions?
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Post by Santi on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:01 am


i dont have to say who this is for... you already know... YOU know...


the simplest words

the winter nights, the summer days,
can never take my breath away...
and just this once, dare what i say,
id give my life for you to stay...
ill hold you close, look in your eyes,
and love you truely til i die...
without a word, when theres no more life,
after all the planets do collide...
please shed your doubt, and shake your fears...
i loved you then and will forever my life, my love... my dear....

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Post by Shika Aburame on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:02 am

ur opinion of my poem....................
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Post by Santi on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:17 am

"not bad.. could use some help though.. i think you really need to think about how you feel and write about it... and about mine what do you think?"

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Post by Shika Aburame on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:18 am

good^^
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Post by Nabiki BonesOnikai on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:31 am

Kyubbi... you need work on the sylables in each verse
but it's pretty good, just try to make it more even

and santi thts great^^
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Post by Shika Aburame on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:32 am

............
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Post by Nabiki BonesOnikai on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:33 am

its pretty good though dont get me wrong... just the rhythm is off a bit
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Post by Shika Aburame on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:34 am

(goes insane)
it is good!!!!!DX
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Post by Santi on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:35 am

"why thank you very much Nabby i appreciate the words of encouragement i might just write a few more"

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Post by Shika Aburame on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:36 am

dont tell me mine aint good i thought about it for like a week!!!!! Evil or Very Mad
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Post by Nabiki BonesOnikai on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:39 am

o.o a week...
maybe you should write something else... im sure you'll do great at it Kyubbi...
something tht possibly doesn't rhyme
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Post by kirino ducky uchiha on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:40 am

i like both ^^
but on the other hand i was nerver good at giving critasism

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Post by Shika Aburame on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:40 am

ryhming poems is my passion(goes loopy)
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Post by Santi on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:44 am

"i came up with mine in like... 3 minutes maybe"

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Post by Nabiki BonesOnikai on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:48 am

the more you practice the better you'll get i guess
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Post by Santi on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:49 am

"definetly either that or your just gifted"

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Post by Onikira on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:51 am

bro you have a romantic side!? affraid
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Post by Shika Aburame on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:53 am

(hides from deidera)dont make fun of me bro.............
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Post by Onikira on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:53 am

im not its just shoking
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Post by kirino ducky uchiha on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:54 am

i wrote one its kinda crapy tho

when u cry
i cry

when u smile
i smile

when u laugh
i laugh

when ur angry
im angry

when ur sad
im sad

when u say "i love u"
i say "i love u too"

when u die
i die inside

when u hurt
i will try and hurt for u

when u go to heaven
ill be there waiting

when u touch me
i touch back

when u kiss me
i kiss u back

when u tear my heart out
i try moving on

and when u say "i dont love u anymore"
ill still say "i love u"

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Post by Shika Aburame on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:55 am

(hits deidera w/ fire phoenix jutsu)
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Post by Nabiki BonesOnikai on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:57 am

thts good samia. i like it^^
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Post by Santi on Sat Mar 22, 2008 12:57 am

"i really like it alot baby... it really shows me how much you care.. and i love you so much"

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